your my best friend with “Cyndi corkraN” by The Song Writers

Broadjam Artist: The Song WritersSong: your my best friend with “Cyndi corkraN”Reviewer: Ante NovaselicPositive Comments: Listening to the vocal delivery alone the song reminds me of something Roger Waters might have attempted to sing. The instrumentat…

The Song Writers

Broadjam Artist: The Song Writers
Song: your my best friend with “Cyndi corkraN”

Reviewer: Ante Novaselic

Positive Comments: Listening to the vocal delivery alone the song reminds me of something Roger Waters might have attempted to sing. The instrumentation has a little of that Blackhearts vibe. Maybe even the eagle’s during their New Kid in Town era!…

Constructive Comments: I really couldn’t understand most of the lyrics and I think the reason for that was because of all the reverb they were drowning in and because of the female counter melody that was stepping on the lead vocal heavily in certain parts of the song. I think I understand what you were trying to do with that counter melody but tucking it away a little in the mix and not having it out front as much might solve the clutter in the mix.

NAPPYHEAD by MES

Broadjam Artist: MESSong: NAPPYHEADReviewer: Calico KingPositive Comments: I am a hip hop head, and I dig artists from all geographical spots, and multiple subgenres. I think this cut has an interesting vocalist an aggressive, hyper-masculine vocal ton…

MES

Broadjam Artist: MES
Song: NAPPYHEAD

Reviewer: Calico King

Positive Comments: I am a hip hop head, and I dig artists from all geographical spots, and multiple subgenres. I think this cut has an interesting vocalist an aggressive, hyper-masculine vocal tone that screams authenticity. The instrumental is certainly current with what’s coming out right now, and has all the hall marks of a good hip hop beat. It’s also got a good length, so points for the overall arrangement. I like that the artist goes in, does his thing then steps out–so overall the artist has a good understanding of what needs to be on a commercially viable hip hop record, which is indicative of a very attentive and aware artist. Would like to hear more.

Constructive Comments: I understand that the rapper is being real, and I’m not doubting any of his street credibility, but I felt the song needed stronger lyrics, more originality, and should consider putting more effort and thought in to the rhyme scheme. I understand that gangster rap isn a’t concerned with being ultra lyrical, but there are always more creative ways than repeating “N*****” as an end rhyme more than 4-8 times. If I thought this artist didn’t have it in him to be more dynamic, and more original, I wouldn’t be as hard on the lyrics but he shows more ability at the start of the second verse when he drops a couple bars with multi-syllabic end rhymes. I think the rhymes in this cut are way too elementary, way too redundant, and it takes away from the track. It makes the artist seem lazy, and ultimately undercuts the quality of the track. With gangster rap, for it to reach a broad level where it’s going to make money past regional, you can’t rely on some basic, clich, braggadocio and expect the listener to relate or even vibe with it. If all you’re going to say in the song is how hard you are, how soft everyone else is, how much money/women/dope you work with, you have to bump up the creativity. Employ narratives, employ more imagery. If you’re trying to show how much of a savage you are, step up the metaphors, step up the allusions–literally show us all this gangster stuff rather than tell us, and in hip hop, the greatest gangster rappers of all time, from Scarface to Project Pat to Master P, they conveyed their gangster passes by doing anything and everything minus relying on a handful of weak self aggrandizing lyrics. Plus, with such a commercial beat and a marketable voie rgister, if you actually made the song about something or more unique, you could have something that was for sure marketable.

Trampoline by L. $hamPain

Broadjam Artist: L. $hamPainSong: TrampolineReviewer: Jeff RobertsPositive Comments: OK someone’s been listening to Edith Piaf and St Vincent… This is innocent, creepy, 1930’s, and current all at once. And you start getting a bit alt-Country as it …

L. $hamPain

Broadjam Artist: L. $hamPain
Song: Trampoline

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: OK someone’s been listening to Edith Piaf and St Vincent… This is innocent, creepy, 1930’s, and current all at once. And you start getting a bit alt-Country as it goes along. This is a fantastically compelling vocal performance. Comparisons: Lucinda Williams, Annie Clark, Anna Calvi and an AltCountry singer I can’t remember the name. This is real Art with a capital A–there’s so much originality, quirk, and passion here.

Constructive Comments: Big NO to that Syndrums TOOM TOOM sound in the first break. I think you need a chorus or refrain that’s big and brings in backing vocals, and one that offers a big contrasting lift to the verses. You’ve got a cult favorite here that needs some architectural moves yet to bring it to the best it can be but this is so cool.

Superman Curl by John Masarone

Broadjam Artist: John MasaroneSong: Superman CurlReviewer: Jeff RobertsPositive Comments: This is really solid early 80s Power Pop like The Connells, REM, Mitch Easter, Posies, or like a band I was in called The Deal. Very much like the Posies actuall…

John Masarone

Broadjam Artist: John Masarone
Song: Superman Curl

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: This is really solid early 80s Power Pop like The Connells, REM, Mitch Easter, Posies, or like a band I was in called The Deal. Very much like the Posies actually. Really strong and enjoyable vocal performance with very good lyrics, melody, and changes underneath that add drama. Excellent arrangement, jangly guitars, and the backing vocals are ace. This is really like a period classic that I never heard before. Superb work!!

Constructive Comments: The vocal level needs to come up a bit (or back off the instruments). I wonder if that hard beater on the busy kick part isn’t too much? It drives hard but it works against the melodic charm of the tune. Overall the drums have huge energy but is it working for the song best? On repeat listen I’ll take the question away–the drums are stepping on the tune. I’d dial the volume back on the drums, especially the kick and EQ the kick a bit to more solid “felt rather than heard” bass tone.

Must Be Nice – Instrumental by The Melody Stuart Project – Remerge Band

Broadjam Artist: The Melody Stuart Project – Remerge BandSong: Must Be Nice – InstrumentalReviewer: Jeff RobertsPositive Comments: This isn’t Punk as much as 90’s like The Offspring/Blink 182, Weezer, etc. It’s a tight song bed waiting for vocals.Co…

The Melody Stuart Project -  Remerge Band

Broadjam Artist: The Melody Stuart Project – Remerge Band
Song: Must Be Nice – Instrumental

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: This isn’t Punk as much as 90’s like The Offspring/Blink 182, Weezer, etc. It’s a tight song bed waiting for vocals.

Constructive Comments: not a song till you got a song…but this is a great start. I’m not a fan of this style but so what–plenty are.

Listen by Patrick Dude

Patrick Dude

Broadjam Artist: Patrick Dude
Song: Listen

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: That’s a damn cool intro–very thick and lush. The vocals have a Smashing Pumpkins/Alice in Chains/Marilyn Manson dissaffection vibe. This is pretty down and druggy stuff, which is a sound a lot of people really like, eg NIN fans. Nice acoustic guitar section and the end and the hanging vocal end tag is very haunting & suspenseful. This ain’t my kind of tune which probably makes it mean more when I say it’s excellent. You’ve got a tune that the right audience will crave!

Constructive Comments: I think the vocals are fighting the instrument levels in a number of places–I’d make a tad more mix space for the vocals to really come through strong. The vibe of that intro with that great beat and texture could be used more in the tune.

Patrick Dude

Broadjam Artist: Patrick Dude
Song: Listen

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: That’s a damn cool intro–very thick and lush. The vocals have a Smashing Pumpkins/Alice in Chains/Marilyn Manson dissaffection vibe. This is pretty down and druggy stuff, which is a sound a lot of people really like, eg NIN fans. Nice acoustic guitar section and the end and the hanging vocal end tag is very haunting & suspenseful. This ain’t my kind of tune which probably makes it mean more when I say it’s excellent. You’ve got a tune that the right audience will crave!

Constructive Comments: I think the vocals are fighting the instrument levels in a number of places–I’d make a tad more mix space for the vocals to really come through strong. The vibe of that intro with that great beat and texture could be used more in the tune.

Fight Of My Life by Tom Reock

Broadjam Artist: Tom ReockSong: Fight Of My LifeReviewer: Jeff RobertsPositive Comments: Starting out more Latin/New Age than Prog, but so what, great sounds, and the edgy guitar takes it into Prog territory. I am really really liking the vocal qualit…

Tom Reock

Broadjam Artist: Tom Reock
Song: Fight Of My Life

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: Starting out more Latin/New Age than Prog, but so what, great sounds, and the edgy guitar takes it into Prog territory. I am really really liking the vocal quality and performance. Once the vocals start, and especially on the chorus, this reminds me of Kings X with Doug Pinnick singing. On the chorus I’m thinking “Damn I really like this tune” –excellent chord changes on the chorus with the change to IV minor.

Constructive Comments: The intro is too long, and I think a bit too “Island Sugary”. I’d drop the triangle and make this more of a straight ahead Rock tune. I *didn’t* like the guitar break/solo–me personally I hate pick harmonics but more importantly you got into some mindless riffs in the middle of the solo–I would really urge making it a pure melodic solo with no “box of riffs” crutches used, and no pick harmonics…just for me.This is EXCELLENT work. You really made my ears jump on this one.

there’s got to be a bridge by Gary Mazzola

Broadjam Artist: Gary MazzolaSong: there’s got to be a bridgeReviewer: Jeff AshbakerPositive Comments: Solid performance with straight forward vocal. I thought this had a Bob Seeger feel to it Constructive Comments: I felt like I wanted to hear a cresc…

Gary Mazzola

Broadjam Artist: Gary Mazzola
Song: there’s got to be a bridge

Reviewer: Jeff Ashbaker

Positive Comments: Solid performance with straight forward vocal. I thought this had a Bob Seeger feel to it

Constructive Comments: I felt like I wanted to hear a crescendo type part like in a Bob Seeger song, after the dead of night line that would give a big boost and maybe add some hope??

Luna is a Dancer by Bill Beach

Bill Beach

Broadjam Artist: Bill Beach
Song: Luna is a Dancer

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: Nice potent mix and a strong song with a clear & compelling vocal performance. Nice rolling feel and a very pleasant vocal timbre. Kinda Jimmy Buffet meets Lyle Lovett! Nice work

Constructive Comments: Too much intro that’s not really interesting despite being very tight. I’d recommend coming in with vocals straight off. The drum fills are losing the meter pretty severely–much better to have a straight up Country 4/4 keeping things tight throughout–it ain’t about the drummer it’s about the song. The bass should be doing solid arpeggios or country root/5th playing instead of meandering around behind and off the beat. The lead breaks need to make a concise melodic statement IN and OUT. Don’t wander is the basic advice to all instruments here. This is a good tune and easily made much stronger still!!

Bill Beach

Broadjam Artist: Bill Beach
Song: Luna is a Dancer

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: Nice potent mix and a strong song with a clear & compelling vocal performance. Nice rolling feel and a very pleasant vocal timbre. Kinda Jimmy Buffet meets Lyle Lovett! Nice work

Constructive Comments: Too much intro that’s not really interesting despite being very tight. I’d recommend coming in with vocals straight off. The drum fills are losing the meter pretty severely–much better to have a straight up Country 4/4 keeping things tight throughout–it ain’t about the drummer it’s about the song. The bass should be doing solid arpeggios or country root/5th playing instead of meandering around behind and off the beat. The lead breaks need to make a concise melodic statement IN and OUT. Don’t wander is the basic advice to all instruments here. This is a good tune and easily made much stronger still!!

WALKING OUT THE DOOR by Charlie Shock

Charlie Shock

Broadjam Artist: Charlie Shock
Song: WALKING OUT THE DOOR

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: Harrison & Clapton joined in on this one. Obviously this is Charley Shock–by now I recognize the distinctive voice and top notch Power Pop construction. It would be a chart smash if it weren’t for that Canadian accent…lol. This is excellent work!!!

Constructive Comments: Like what? Actually I’m not big on key changes in the post ’78 world but it works just fine.

Charlie Shock

Broadjam Artist: Charlie Shock
Song: WALKING OUT THE DOOR

Reviewer: Jeff Roberts

Positive Comments: Harrison & Clapton joined in on this one. Obviously this is Charley Shock–by now I recognize the distinctive voice and top notch Power Pop construction. It would be a chart smash if it weren’t for that Canadian accent…lol. This is excellent work!!!

Constructive Comments: Like what? Actually I’m not big on key changes in the post ’78 world but it works just fine.