Broadjam Artist: Jim Aitken
Song: Reach The Sky
Reviewer: dolylamby’s posse
Positive Comments: I like the song and it’s theme. Your picture you’ve painted is clear and precise.
Constructive Comments: I would look at some of your wording in your in the chorus. (‘Where’ is used to start both lines 6 & 8. You may want to say something like, “And golden eagles fly” and possibly dropping the word ‘the’ in the last line…”Where beautiful mountains reach the sky”. This would give you a bit more time and it wouldn’t seem rushed.