Broadjam Artist: DENNIS MAKEPEACE
Song: why has love got to be so sad
Reviewer: Peter Boynton
Positive Comments: -I liked this song from the start. Thanks for sharing it!-Solid arrangement and players. Pro studio? Sounds it.-I listened 3X to catch as much as possible as I wanted to be clear with any thoughts I have. 3Xs, my friend. That’s a rave right there!-Nice vocal quality and delivery. Yours or a studio?
Constructive Comments: -Great to include the lyrics! Very helpful. Maybe put them in a standard verse-prechorus-chorus-bridge form to help get a sense of your song structure a bit faster.-You vary the melodic line/range from the verse to the pre-chorus very nicely, but the chorus melody doesn’t lift with an expanded range. Combine that sameness in melody with the repetition of the hook, and I felt the chorus stalled a bit instead of having increased contrast and tension. Maybe take that chorus vocal line up, and let it offer a ‘cry’ factor to the vocalist’s inflection? That might give more of an emotional impact and let that chorus/hook really stand out.-To my previous point, you add melodic/lyric variation and syncopation that sets the 2nd verse off from the first. Very nice! get that into the chorus and a really good song could notch up to ‘great’.-Not sure your intention: SYNC placement? artist pitch? singer-songwriter artist (you)? It’s a bit long either way. The instrumental bridge is very well done and you might consider going into a 3rd pre-chorus right after it to condense your vs3 and pr-ch3 thoughts and then head right back into the chorus.-Very nice work! I enjoyed listening to this and thinking about it.