Broadjam Artist: Redlady8029
Song: Instead
Reviewer: Kate Carpenter
Positive Comments: Great intro! This is a haunting story of a lost lover and pleading for him to come back. The narrator pleads her case “You should be with me” – she’s better than the heart-breaker out there. Clearly told story. Love the story/boring rhyme, very original! Vocal is clear, dramatic and beautifully done. Spot on! What a voice! Nice instrumentation. Great production.
Constructive Comments: There’s a couple of things I noticed. In verse 2, the more/story rhyme doesn’t work for me. You need a 2 syllable word to make it less awkward. In the chorus you end on the word instead. I wonder if “instead of her” would work better? Ease out the ending more gradually.