Broadjam Artist: Derrick Procell
Song: PRETENDING
Reviewer: Redlady8029
Positive Comments: Did you like specific instrumental parts, lyrics–wanted more of story too general with current lyricsmusic–Chorus melody I enjoyed I wanted more of a backstory for this song.What: V1 = Introduce the big idea Chorus 1 = what’s the big idea V2 = what’s next? Why keep listeningChorus 2 = say the big idea again Bridge = what’s next? Why keep listening? / this is what a listener takeaways Outro = unresolved / open for listener’s interpretation 1) Does my intro make you want to hear the song? Somewhat 2) Does my opening line draw you in and make you want to hear more? Some what3) Is my melody interesting? some what 4) Does my melody get stuck in your head? no5) Does my chorus stand out and take the song to a higher place? yes
Constructive Comments: 6) Is my chorus easy to sing along with after one listen? yes 7) What does my song make the listener want to do? Dance? Cry? Laugh? Sing? Cry 8) What universal emotion does my song tap into? Longing 9) Is my idea strong enough to carry an entire song? yes 10) Would I want to listen to this over and over in my car? Maybe with a better backstory.