Broadjam Artist: David James
Song: Ideal World (Ft. CoriAnder & Amy Reader)
Reviewer: Good Advice
Positive Comments: I liked this song probably better then my ratings suggest, and that has a lot to do with what I perceive as flaws. But overall I enjoyed the lyrics, they were thoughtfully crafted, not repetitive and well performed vocally.
Constructive Comments: I didn’t like any decision you made with your percussion track. I thought it held the song back instead of bolstering it. I think simpler and more traditional would have been better for this song, or do without it altogether and just make it an acoustic song. I didn’t see that part doing enough to make this an electro-pop song, and didn’t see them adding real value to the track.I think what hurt you more then that was how the guitar was recorded and mixed. I was really trying to focus in on that a little bit because it was getting lost at times. It was too low and out of balance with the rest of the track, which is a shame because where I could focus on it I thought it had a good melody that was adding to the song and vocals. I also felt like part of the problem was it had too much reverb added to it. There are moments where I felt like it kind of loses the melody into an lamost white noise and you lose the notes. That might be why it was so low in the mix too, because when you start adding reverb it lessens the overall strength of that sound. So you might want to tinker with that.I did really like the song, a few minor adjustments and it would be a top rated song for me across the board.