Broadjam Artist: Steve Dafoe – Songwriter
Song: My Angel (Folk, Country – Alternative)
Reviewer: Chet Nichols
Positive Comments: A sweet, sweet, song with a great tale embedded in it. Great guitar work. Did you record this as you sang and played? I liked the beginning, as you added a second guitar. I loved the pictures you painted with the lyrics, although they seemed to wander a bit….writing a good angel song, is tough, but you did a great job and are on to something.
Constructive Comments: So, I just want to give you some constructive thoughts about how to make this song better. The vocals are a bit pitchy, that is why I asked if you sang and played as you recorded this song. If possible, it always better to split them into different tracks so you can make adjustments later. Using a digital DAW program is it easy to fix sections.I love the simplicity of the song, but was hoping for the song to add a few other instruments to help build it. As the second verse kicks it, it would have been nice to add a simple drum track and bass…and as second chorus kicks in add some strings and maybe a simple vocal choir track and also add some backing vocals…..This is really an inspiring song and deserves some tweeps.Finally, I’ll suggest you go over the lyrics and clean up and simply them, so there is a bit more space between the lines….they seem a bit rushed in a coulee places….Anyway, REALLY nice song and I hope you find my thoughts as something to ponder. I’d make a vocal-guitar track like this one and one that has more instrumentation and embellishments.Thanks for sharing….best of luck.