Broadjam Artist: John Masarone
Song: Tell Me What You Want To Hear
Reviewer: Jeff Roberts
Positive Comments: Love the drum sound and the guitar parts. The dropout after the second chorus and before the reprise is a really nice touch. This is John–I’ve heard this song before. It’s a class effort and it could definitely be right in there on any classic rock playlist.
Constructive Comments: Please note that this is offered as helpful criticism!!! I commented in the email that I think you’re using your voice well this time. Except for the first verse, you know there’s still a straining quality throughout that is uncomfortable to listen to. You’re making pitch but there’s no room for vibrato or dynamic variation because you’re maxing out your voice. Also, and this is totally an aesthetic preference thing, but I think you’re singing 1985. There’s a very predictable rhythm to the phrasing and the lyrics are very obvious and pedantic in places. If I were producing this I’d get you to sing off the beat, and not start every phrase on one and sing until four. “I’ll sell you down the river” is a great line. And the chorus is really cool lyrically too. I’d bring up the backing vocals–they’re really good.Much of what I’m saying would make more sense if we were hanging out and able to work with lines & parts in real time.This tune by Sloan, “The Other Man”, reminds me a lot of your tune. Have a listen and see if you can take anything useful away? https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=kslDI0CZlOY