Broadjam Artist: MES
Song: Paper Alarm
Reviewer: Calico King
Positive Comments: I think this song has market potential if you built it/improved some pretty easy fixes. Overall i dig your flow and would like to hear more of this artist. The quality of lyrics is decent– I give props to the hook. hip hop hooks with no vocalist/singer can be tricky, due to the fact they call for some sort of break in the general cadence of the verse, and I felt the hook to have a nice flow to it. The Instrumentation is definitely up to par with what’s currently out. The vocalist has a good tone in his voice, and the arrangement is straight forward. Overall it’s pretty fair hip hop cut. Props for finding a clever way to work lyrics around the synth loop, with the “paper alarm” concept.
Constructive Comments: I think the beat could use some break from just the synthesizer looped. It gets a little repetitious and having some sort of bridge or midsection could kill the monotony. I felt that the arrangement was a little bit predictable but that’s not a bad thing necessarily. If your goal is to get this on to the radio, I’d say everything is strong except the beat, and perhaps the tone of the rapper, which stays more or less flat through out the entire piece. I’d like to see this vocalist try taking some chances, and alter his inflection, his delivery, sort of like he does when he speeds up the cadence at the end of the first verse. Really the biggest challenge with this song, is the fact that it’s good, but it could use something to really make it stand out.