Broadjam Artist: Bill Dake
Song: Short Story (Folk-Contemporary)
Reviewer: Chet Nichols
Positive Comments: Very nice story song. Like the guitar work. Has an easy-going smooth recording and lush, spacey arrangement. Very unique melody that draws the listener in and captures my attention and keeps it. A very nice song for a movie or TV show with it’s free-form, free-flowing atmosphere. Nice job, thanks for sharing……
Constructive Comments: I get where you are going with this song, but there are a few places were it needs some tweaking and it will be perfect. First the vocal needs to be re-done in spots where it is clearly pitchy. Try to be very critical of your own vocals and make sure the pitch doesn’t draw people away from the content of the song. I think the mix needs some tweaking and slight readjustments as it is a wee bit unbalanced. The instrumentation is excellent and the arrangement is very, very nice, so just balance out the left-to-right mix levels. The vocal has a very nice quality and is mixed very nicely in the track. it is warm and tender and helps to paint the pictures. There is a string PAD that comes in later in the track and I think that can be incorporated and weaved in and out of the track more. Lifting the volume 1-to-2-to-3 ticks would be interesting to play with just keep it subtle. Finally, a simple chorus/hook or retain will they the song up nicely and there doesn’t seem to be on in the song. Could be as simple as a repeated line at the end of each verse….but the song needs one. Hope this give you some ideas to chew on…it is a very nice tune and worth the effort.Best to you…..