Reviewer: Jeff Roberts
Positive Comments: Great driving beat with an urgent tambourine and chord progression that gives a tragic mood. I can’t quite understand the lyrics but the melody and phrasing work so well I know the lyrics are good. This sounds like Billy Corgan / Smashing Pumpkins if he were a better songwriters.
Constructive Comments: There’s so much chorus on the guitar it makes the sound very thin. The guitar break at 1:57 totally doesn’t fit the song at first but then what you end up with *does* give a strong bridge. The finish of the tune doesn’t match the vibe you’ve created. I think there are a number of things to fix and glue together better but there is a great song here and some really cool things going on. Overall I think the sound is too trebly and the vocal diction needs to be clearer. Some sweet harmony vocals would be a great addition.