Broadjam Artist: Bobby Caputo
Song: Getting My Heart Back
Reviewer: Katilyn
Positive Comments: love the guitar riff in the intro, and the arrangement is good.
Constructive Comments: I would re-work the lyrics. Here are some ideas for how to do that….1. I would not start the song with your hook (“getting my heart back”)2. Rework the last line of verse one, so you end the verse on your hook (“getting my heart back”)…because the way it’s currently written, it sounds like “so i can give it up to you” is going to be the hook through the rest of the song. 3. Add more to the story in verse 1. You just keep saying the same thing in different ways, the way it’s currently written (she took it – i gave it to her = same thing) (I didn’t think i’d need it – seemed like the thing to do = same thing). Cover those topics once, and add some lines about where you were when she took it, or how you felt when it happened. That’s what will really get your listeners to connect to you…for example, David Nail’s song is about the same thing, but he describes the scene more….sitting at a red light and it just fell out of her mouth like it was nothing, and everyone who hears that thinks YES! I’ve felt that and been in that situation! Does that help?