Broadjam Artist: Greg Lambert
Song: The Love I Want
Reviewer: Kate Carpenter
Positive Comments: Love goes wrong in a lot of places in the songwriting world, but this time it ends in the party room of The Dragon Inn, a Chinese restaurant. After 7 beers and tossing her egg foo yung, she calls it quits and he’s left with the wedding ring and this sad song. The lyrics and rhymes in this song are extremely original and effective. Young/done/crumbs/numb. It’s all amazing lyric writing. The vocals are clear and the vocals convey the sadness of the song. Nice guitar playing. If there’s a niche for this song, it could be successful. Even if there’s no market for it, it’s a well-written and nicely performed composition. Bravo!
Constructive Comments: I just want to say that I almost had to laugh at the first verse about her throwing her egg foo yung. Gotta ask…was this all made up or did it really happen? I am guessing made up, but my mother always used to say that truth be stranger than fiction, so maybe it IS true? Suggestion: Write a bridge for the song. At the end, you repeat the chorus twice. Why not insert a bridge? Then maybe end with a chorus. Or put the bridge before the last verse. Your song is okay without a bridge, just trying to brainstorm a little. FYI I have a china song. It’s called Made in China. Look it up under Kate Carpenter. Quite different from your tune!