Broadjam Artist: Bob Birthisel
Song: I’ve Got My Telephone
Reviewer: Empty Atlas
Positive Comments: That keys solo after the first hook is really fantastic – I’d listen back for that alone. Another thing I think you did really well is keep your lyrics really centered on the main concept, which isn’t always the case. I also think your voice is a great fit for the sort of modernized New Wave pop sound, so no complaints on that front.
Constructive Comments: Just full disclosure, I feel like this song may sound older than it’s intended to. It’s talking about technology but feels outdated in how it does that. I do think a second pass on the verses would help to remove some of the more old-school terminology and make it feel a bit more timely. Given that it does have an 80s-esque sound, that may be intentional, but as is, I can’t tell for sure. I also think the chorus/hook could use something to really make it stand out – it blends in a bit with what came before musically. Think it’s nearly there, though!