Broadjam Artist: Bob Bentley
Song: Out Of The Equation
Reviewer: Lonnie G
Positive Comments: Really solid Intro…
Constructive Comments: cool…shades of Tom Petty….a few little points…you can drop all the “understoods”…if you get what i meani.e: try to eliminate all the she’s…She made her way down that familiar trackShe wiped her eyes as she pulled the doorShe’s moving on, she wont be back no more made her way down that familiar track wiped her eyes as she pulled the door she’s moving on, wont be back no more”Now she can give out all the love she’s been saving”…could try:”gives out all the love she’s been saving”it just becomes more succinct…good to drop words that are more redundantvery nice tune….