Broadjam Artist: Jeff Ashbaker
Song: Bobby, Why’d You Do It
Reviewer: Good Advice
Positive Comments: This song had good energy to it and a fun vibe, the kind of song that would make people want to get up and dance.
Constructive Comments: Two big issues here. You dramatically overuse the word Bobby. The lyrics were so much better when you weren’t using Bobby every single line. Especially given that the refrain is “Bobby why’d you do it?” the overuse cheapens the refrain. I would say you have to get rid of about half the bobby’s to make this a better song. I am sure you can identify places where the word is not really necessary.Second one is that I notice that sometimes you are putting more force into your vocals then other times, which is fine. But its affecting your mix. By your volume and intensity going up and down it makes it very difficult for whoever is producing the mix to put the vocals in proper balance with the music because what would be balanced is constantly changing. There are a lot of times when you are darn close to peaking vocally if not outright peaking. Normally its the percussion section that causes peaking problems not vocals. You clearly have sung this song more then a few times and sing it the same way. when singing live peaking is less of an issue, but in a recording setting I suggest when you know you are getting to parts of the song where you are going to give it a little more. Make sure you lean away from the mic a little, that way it will be easier to create a balanced mix. You will still get the effect of the more force, without throwing the balance off and/or causing peaking problems.