Broadjam Artist: Raymond Garrobo
Song: The Kingdom
Reviewer: Sixty Miles Down
Positive Comments: Cool song. It has a John Lennon meets U2 kind of a vibe for me. The piano is very melodic and the bass has a good amount of punch. The vocal melody is catchy and the chorus is simple but memorable. Great job on that. I know I’m going to have this song stuck in my head tomorrow.
Constructive Comments: I really like this song. Here’s my constructive comments. First off the song starts very abruptly. I think there should be some sort of into leading into the verse. I would back off of the vocal effects a bit. The singer has a good voice and I think the effect takes away from it a little bit. Are the drums looped? There’s no fills to take the verse into the chorus. The song needs more movement. I like the change at 2:16 but the drums don’t do anything to give the part a sense of change. I think the guitars should open up during that change and then drop back out going back into the next part. I really like the la la la la la la there is a place line. I really think you should have another vocal singing a higher harmony over the la la’s but not the rest of the line. I think it would make that more of a hook and stand out more. I really like this song and think it has a lot of potential. I hope my feedback is useful. Best of luck.