Broadjam Artist: Steve Dafoe – Songwriter
Song: Darling, Have I Not Done This Well? (Country- Classic)
Reviewer: Kate Carpenter
Positive Comments: This guy’s got a great country voice, crystal clear with that country-honesty you want to hear in a singer in this genre. This sounds like a basic guitar/voice demo, but it does the job of getting the melody and lyric across…a good start. There are some good word pictures here. The suitcase, the beans and rice.
Constructive Comments: I think this song needs work. The verses are not tightly constructed and it was hard to make out the structure as I was listening. Work on “word economy”. It seems like the verses had too many lines and the rhyming structure wasn’t consistent. I’d have to re-examine the lyrics online to see if what I am saying holds water. The first 2 lines of the chorus are original and effective, but you lost me on got/lot. “I love you a lot” just kind of falls flat in the song (not your voice, the phrase). The love gone wrong theme places all the blame on the guy. Keep on writing and singing! You have talent!