Broadjam Artist: lost on foot
Song: be my valentine
Reviewer: Kate Carpenter
Positive Comments: Here’s a rock song about a one night stand with a girl who has a scar over her eye, a compelling subject that makes you wonder why and want to hear “the rest of the story.” Nice rock power intro leads nicely into the song. Lots of vivid word pictures are used to tell the story. Favorite rhyme: wine/valentine. Good job telling the story and sticking to the subject.
Constructive Comments: I think the chorus is out of your range. Way too low. Down in the dregs…it made it hard to hear the lyrics. I think I caught the “roses are red violets are blue” but like I said, it was hard to make out the entire chorus. Either bring it up in the mix or change the key a 1/2 or whole step higher. Or you could add a higher harmony? The ending seemed too abrupt.One night stand songs. Personally, they make me very sad. Not that your song is poorly written…it’s well-written. It is my personal belief that the Lord created sex for marriage and one night stands are just plain hurtful and wrong, against the biblical commandments about fornication and adultery. You can call me an old fogey if you want, but if it’s a true story, I feel sorry for you and for the girl. The good news is that Jesus is the great healer of broken hearts. There are a lot of hurting hearts out there that need healing. If yours is one of them, I hope you will find Jesus, or He will find you!