Broadjam Artist: N.Jones, Music Designer (Protilius Productions)
Song: I was doing alright (vocal piano solo demo)
Reviewer: Simon Finn
Positive Comments: The first two verses get off to a great start here – it sound like a song from a theatre show or musical. Lovely to hear the vocalist soar over the top as the piano descends. This has a nice feel to it.
Constructive Comments: Too many cliches in the lyrics – rainbows are difficult things to write about. I feel, considering the need for bitterness in the lyrics you could have dug deeper for something a bit sharper. The first verses are great – but the bridge – the second containing the lyric “blunder” really are much weaker and I’d consider a re-write of this whole section. It might be the arrangement, but it’s very difficult for the ear to follow where you are going lyrically or harmonically at that point, whereas the rest has a gentle ease to it which is pleasing to follow.