Broadjam Artist: Mike Cantwell – TalentEast Productions
Song: (Country) First Words Out of Your Heart (Do help rewrite)
Reviewer: Kate Carpenter
Positive Comments: I liked your “this is a rough demo” intro. Nice to have that qualifier…you’re inviting comments, so here goes. I think you have a really good chorus here. First words out of your heart (not mouth, that was creative). And thank God your next line wasn’t “I’d know we’d never part.” 🙂 Your first verse is the strongest with the sunshine/warming/magnet word pictures. Bridge is well placed. I liked the triple rhyme same/name/came. I liked the honesty/freshness of the lyric “I hoped you weren’t already taken” Wide open was a stretch but it sort of worked as a soft rhyme.
Constructive Comments: Vocals are a bit muddy and hard to discern the words in certain parts. Pitch is sometimes an issue. I’d like to see more consistency in the rhyme scheme in the verses. It seems rather haphazard to me. Keep working, songwriter! You’ve got a good start (just like the relationship in the song). I always wonder when I hear songs like this if it’s about a real person or made up.