Reviewer: Richie Sings
Positive Comments: I like your voice alot.
Constructive Comments: The quality is bold to me.
Reviewer: CAEDMON’S DREAM
Positive Comments: * Sequenced synth intro starts tune nicely* Lead vocal has unique & memorable quality * Instrumentation/arrangement is full and lush * Drums/rhythm track keeps a good groove tight bass!* Tasty key modulations and instrumental hooks * Great closing piece for a TV/Movie/Documentary
Constructive Comments: + could add a couple guitar parts just for variation+ as song develops idea of conflict/despair, can this be represented with a tempo/rhythm/feel change (1/2 X break)?+ swirling keys are ethereal, put them at key parts so they don’t become blase+ add “ethnic/regional” sounds if available
Reviewer: Jeff Roberts
Positive Comments: This opens up sounding very much like Ryan Adams’ “New York, New York”. This sounds better with each listen. Really really strong writing in terms of structure, melody, and lyrics. Very nice vocal performance. I really like the chord lift on the pre chorus–it’s a great setup for the chorus/refrain.
Constructive Comments: Listen closely to Ryan Adams’ “New York, New York” for comparison against a masterpiece. First thing drop the effects on the rhythm guitar and go for nice clean, warm sound, and add or substitute and jangly, strumming acoustic guitar part. I think the bass is too plonk plonk plonk in the verses–it sounds like Boston’s “Long Time”, which was 40 years ago. Having it groove and gently move would add a lot. I’d take most of the slapback off the lead vocal, and put some tube drive and just the tiniest bit of distortion in to give it some grit. There’s a bit too much low mid in the vocal–it accentuates the somewhat nasal tone you have. I really don’t like the solo guitar at all. It’s trying to hard, and putting too much Dickie Betts intensity. And the sound is harsh. Simpler, major pentatonic with a smooth tone would be better.All IMO and all intended to help with the tune. This is really solid writing, playing, and singing!
Broadjam Artist: Patti and Beau Burt, Kim Kelley
Song: I’VE BEEN AWAY FROM LOVE TOO LONG bluegrass version
Positive Comments: Playful and bouncy country thingie, pleasantly acoustic, and acoustically pleasant. Pleasant female voice and pleasant banjo. Did I say pleasant?
Constructive Comments: Maybe just a little shorter, but not, it’s just me, of course, impatiently impatient.
Reviewer: Jeff Roberts
Positive Comments: Great intro that calls both Tom Petty’s Free Fallin’ and Allmans’ Melissa to mind–then you bring vocals in right on cue. Clean and powerful vocals that are given lots of space and hold up to the challenge! Incredibly pleasing vocal timbre and a very convincing emotional performance. This kinda song could help a lot of guys get married if it were playing in the truck. This is one of the best voices out there. Great bridge that really lifts.
Constructive Comments: beautiful eye–heyes I’d recommend not making two syllables out of ‘eyes’ I think it’s awkward and weak. Great as is but I’d love to hear what it’d sound like with a chord walk up on “then I saw you” I think that would kill. “It’s just something…inside of me” is good but not great, when you really want great at that moment.I’m not a hitmaker in Nashville but I’d really like to work on the lyrics/phrasing and chord structure with you to see if I could make this better.It’s freakin’ awesome regardless. Nice work!