Now You’re Free by Margie & Art Corey, S. & A. Corey

Margie & Art Corey,  S. & A.  Corey

Broadjam Artist: Margie & Art Corey, S. & A. Corey
Song: Now You’re Free

Reviewer: Elliott Ranney

Positive Comments: I think this song plays well in an urban market. The drums/bass drip with funk. The sax is sinewy and mixed just behind the vocal. I like the language this cat uses. The vocalist is excellent, perfect for the group. Sings with confidence, sort of reminds me of the music Chaka Khan/EW&F.

Constructive Comments: Lyrics are tough to write and I don’t feel qualified to speak to them here, even though I am a lyricist too, I am more of an intuitive writer. What I sense, is a lack of a story/what is being written about. This is not a singer/songwriter wearing your heart on your sleeve with too may verses. I know to catch the attention, jump out with a strong image that grabs the listener. The first line could set the scene then introduce the character/situation. Easier said than done. This one is in the can and you probably won’t revisit it. I suggest working more on the lyric, taking each line and crafting it till it shines. The music is slick and you guys have that down, no doubt. Every industry person I’ve spoken with comes back to the lyric, the lynch pin. The most challenging part of writing. Keep up the good work!

Fool Against Nature / Jazz by Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods

Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods

Broadjam Artist: Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods
Song: Fool Against Nature / Jazz

Reviewer: Elliott Ranney

Positive Comments: The drums sound programmed, the guitar has great voicings with an implied melody. I am taking a wild guess this was written for cues and not necessarily in a song format. There is a piano mixed under the guitar, however, in only a minute and a half, there was no real essence of where the tune was taking me. It felt much like a vamp, which is a good way to start in jazz, exploring improvisation over a short progression. Since it is a rhythm track, I could not say what artist it reminds me of. This artist has a vision and this is the path so far.

Constructive Comments: I gave low scores for the lack of any clear melody that would lay on top of the rhythm track. If it is only this long, leap with something that engages the audience. The implied melody could be could be floating on top via piano/violin/sax,harmonica. Any instrument other than what the artist is playing.

Flawed and Perfect by Dana and Brad

Dana and Brad

Broadjam Artist: Dana and Brad
Song: Flawed and Perfect

Reviewer: Junior Murrell

Positive Comments: David your creativity really comes through here as well as your willingness to go off the reservation. Hear a little Bruno Mars in there. Great track and very unique pal. Al the best

Constructive Comments: My only suggestion here is because of the huge amount of space in the song go for as big a sound as you can achieve, I mean really big, Taiko drums the lot if it works for you. Believe the bigger the better with this track. All the best with it mate.

Heat Haze (ft. CoriAnder and Ruth Gillies) by David James

David James

Broadjam Artist: David James
Song: Heat Haze (ft. CoriAnder and Ruth Gillies)

Reviewer: Junior Murrell

Positive Comments: Reminds me of “I just came to say hello” Katy Perry. Nice pop song. All the best with it.

Constructive Comments: Great pop song. Nicely executed and recorded. You could come a bit bigger with the production especially on the chorus, after all, the chorus is what you selling and want to get people hooked on. Well done. All the best.

I Want My Bunny Back by HarryBudini

HarryBudini

Broadjam Artist: HarryBudini
Song: I Want My Bunny Back

Reviewer: Junior Murrell

Positive Comments: I’m hearing musical, film musical i.e. Greece? It can work. Not much to say on the song. All the best with it.

Constructive Comments: Found a little hard to understand the chorus lyric an i’m monitoring on good studio speaker so this say to me you need to work a bit on the clarity of you mix and making everything heard. All the best with it.

I Want To Be On Top by Marcel

Marcel

Broadjam Artist: Marcel
Song: I Want To Be On Top

Reviewer: Junior Murrell

Positive Comments: Great potential here with this track with crossover potential in two camps pop and rap. Instrumentation can be improved. Reminds a bit of Estelle

Constructive Comments: In places there is too much going on, need to refine the arrangement. Musicianship needs to be tightened up too. The vocal pitching is off in places but hey, so was The Clash and the made a success of it. Recording quality can also be improves. Set out to get the best mix you can, after all, you want people to hear what you’re doing. If it’s in the track I want to hear it otherwise don’t put it in. All the best.

BEFORE THE WORLD STOPS SPINNIN! by Patrick E. Muth

Patrick E. Muth

Broadjam Artist: Patrick E. Muth
Song: BEFORE THE WORLD STOPS SPINNIN!

Reviewer: Dana and Brad

Positive Comments: This song is super fun and super catchy. I couldn’t help smile but listening to it the whole way through. The lyrics nicely match the fun and upbeat feel of thus song. It also has a really lovely harmony. This song is ultimately super positive and I truly enjoyed listening to it! I very much look forward to seeing what else you come up with!

Constructive Comments: I find this sign to be very versatile. It is exactly that happy and inspirational track that everyone needs in their life after a hard day at work. I know it’ll most certainly brighten my hard days at work. While I enjoy the song as is, it wouldn’t hurt to add some compression to the vocals and more of those lovely harmonies! I very much enjoyed taking a listen to this one!

Out of the Gaze of the Evil Eye by Jeff Roberts

Jeff Roberts

Broadjam Artist: Jeff Roberts
Song: Out of the Gaze of the Evil Eye

Reviewer: Dana and Brad

Positive Comments: Lovely beat and very nice melody! This song is very catchy and has a lot of commercial potential. The guitar work is also very well done. Te arrangement is really nice. This is an easy listener that ultimately puts me in a calm and positive mood. This song has a lot of potential. It was a pleasure listening. Thank you!

Constructive Comments: As a general matter, I am not one to give constructive criticism unless I feel that it could be truly be helpful without interfering with the artist’s creative vision. I really enjoyed this song and don’t have any huge changes that I would make to it. You have a wonderful voice, and a bit more harmony throughout and maybe a touch more reverb would be nice. However, this song is ultimately lovely as is. 🙂

It Was Love by Jeff Ashbaker

Jeff Ashbaker

Broadjam Artist: Jeff Ashbaker
Song: It Was Love

Reviewer: Kate Carpenter

Positive Comments: Here’s an interesting story about a couple that was together, raised their kids, drifted apart, and are coming back together after an interval of years. Terrific song plot! Great guitar intro. Instrumentation is sweet and tight. Catchy hook that is fun to listen to. My favorite rhyme: winking/thinking. I love this lyric: Thorn from the paw. Very original! Instrumental guitar lead is fantastic, fun to listen to. Unique story, very engaging. Nice job!

Constructive Comments: Keep on keepin’ on. You’re obviously a polished songwriter and a master storyteller in song. If this song is a true story, I wish you a great happily ever after!

Barbwire Trickett / Rock Alternative by Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods

Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods

Broadjam Artist: Uncle Spider & The Electric Dirt Clods
Song: Barbwire Trickett / Rock Alternative

Reviewer: Kate Carpenter

Positive Comments: Obviously, whoever created this track LOVES to play his/her guitar and is really good at it. There’s a nice energy to this track that picks up into a good vibe as the song progresses. Reminds me of hopping into the van and heading to the beach. Nice job. Bass sounds good. Guitar is sweet!

Constructive Comments: Absent: Drums. I imagine adding some kind of percussion to this would increase the good-feeling vibe created by the guitarist. The guitar sounded kind of weak and cheesy at the beginning, but sounded better at the end. How did that happen? Could have been my faulty ears! Keep up the good work.