Reviewer: Bob Bentley
Positive Comments: This song starts off with great instrumentation and that stays all the way through. Some very good musicianship. The vocal is a pleasant surprise being in the lower register and being double tracked throughout as well. There’s a lot here to enjoy in this song.
Constructive Comments: This song follows an unusual format with parts being repeated in a different order. The premise of the song is original but for me the lyrics are not as strong as other song elements. This is only my view, so feel free to ignore it. However, rhyming “know” with “know” and “touch” with “touch” doesn’t work for me. And this section doesn’t really scan: “She’s been saving all that cash, far a little piece of land A little smile now and then, gets those boys to grin, They drop those,, ones and fives, sometimes we get a ten It all adds up, our private stash, gonna get a little piece of land” For me, I would rather see a more traditional format with rhyming words, rather than repeated words.But it’s your work and I wish you all the best with it.