Do you right by Jon Lyons, Song Writer and Performer

Broadjam Artist: Jon Lyons, Song Writer and PerformerSong: Do you rightReviewer: David JamesPositive Comments: It’s a beautiful song. The vocal is heavenly..very compelling. I like the ‘Can I do You Right’ concept. The chord progression is lovely. The …

Jon Lyons, Song Writer and Performer

Broadjam Artist: Jon Lyons, Song Writer and Performer
Song: Do you right

Reviewer: David James

Positive Comments: It’s a beautiful song. The vocal is heavenly..very compelling. I like the ‘Can I do You Right’ concept. The chord progression is lovely. The song has a wonderful warm dreamy feel. The song delivers a real romantic atmosphere.

Constructive Comments: Lyrically I think that there are too many repetitions of the words ‘time’ and ‘right’. Perhaps you could have explored some rhymes or half-rhymes to introduce some new lyrical elements, just to mix it up a bit. I like the guitar arrangement but maybe the song could have started with a ‘clean’ acoustic guitar and the echo patch could have been introduced later to build the dream effect. I hope I’m not being too critical because it is very strong.

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